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(Authors note: Before you begin reading I have some things I need to point out, first off I do not own Pokemon or any Pokemon related material, those Belong to Nintendo and Game Freak. The only thing I own are the characters personalities that I create for them and the scenarios that they will end up in. Second, I also have to point out that inspiration for this story has a lot to do with the author: Anshee-Rose. So please give her support on her account: anshee-rose.deviantart.com : And also Anshee-Rose, if you read this I would like to thank you, your story is amazing and I have read it fully through, so please accept my thanks as you are partly responsible for this story even existing. Also I would like to point out this is my first story on this site, so criticism will be read and listened to, so I would appreciate it if you could give me some feedback on this story, thank you all for reading and I hope you enjoy.)



        A small, blue and black furred creature running  through a forest like his life depended on it, which in fact it did. He was attacked, everyone he knew was fighting an enemy he had no idea about or why that enemy was even attacking, all he knew was that he had to run and run fast. There was a few of them after him, he didn't count he just ran. He was scared and tired but he couldn't stop running not now. He ran for what to him felt like hours for in reality was only minutes, he ran through a bush and stopped, he was too tired, he had to rest, even if it was just for a second. He finally had enough energy where he was going to run again but when he looked up he saw a man. The man was tall, way taller than this two foot creature, and he was holding something up to the creature. He did not know what was in this man's hand but whatever it is was not good and he needed to get away from it, NOW! But it was too late-*P-TAFF*

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    Hi my name is Jae, I am an 18 year old. I am about 5 foot six, white skinned, Blond hair, and a little scrawny. I enjoy playing video games, spending time with friends, collecting knives and other bladed weapons, and  I also really like anything to do with crime solving, police officers, investigators you name it.

"JAE!", called my brother Jon.

I then walked down the hall to the living room where our game system is located, "Yeah what's up?", I asked.

"Want to watch me play the game?", he asked me.

"Sure but not to long ok, dinner is almost ready"

"Ok." Jon is my younger brother by 3 years, he is 15 now. He is a bit shorter than me and skinnier than me and has brown hair. His likes are similar to mine with video games but he also likes something else, he is a huge fan of "The Flash". He watches the show, reads the comic, has a pop figure of the flash, you name it, he has it. "Boys time for dinner!" we heard our mom call out.

"COMING!" both of us said in unison. We both walked into the kitchen where our Mom and Dad had just finished dinner. My mom was about as tall as me if not shorter and had blond hair, where on the other hand my dad was taller than all of us and had very short brown hair. I had gotten my looks from my mom and my brother got his looks from our dad.

    "Hey here is dinner kids", said my dad.

"We made spaghetti tonight", said our mom. While where I was excited my brother was not, you see me and him are kind of exact opposites, where I like spaghetti, he likes other dishes. Where i like action and anime he likes realistic show with actual actors like Flash and Arrow. Where as the saying opposites attract with magnets, me and him are at each others throats. There are many times where we have bickered, argued, and fought one another, but hey that is what brothers are for, and it drives our parents mad (and anyone else caught in the crossfire as well). Then all four of us sat down to eat. We talked about things that happened to me and my brother at school, and dad talked about his work and Mom talked about what she did here and a pretty funny story with our cat acting stupid. Our Mom and Dad told us while we ate that they were planning on going out somewhere for the summer, we were going to go to Six Flags, both the amusement and the water park and we were going to be there for a couple of days. Jon and I were beaming with joy, we hadn't been to an amusement park in forever, and with school being over in about two months, I myself couldn't wait, and i believe the same goes with Jon.

    We then finally finished up eating, and Jon stayed in the kitchen with Mom and Dad and was scolding them saying he got to choose what we eat tomorrow night and I got on the game system for a little while and my brother not being to happy about it, but hey it was my turn. Around 8pm I got off and went to my room to lay down, I wasn't going to sleep but I was laying down watching Youtube.

While watching I remembered something, I got up and walked into my Mom and Dad's room and asked them, "Hey Mom, Dad I was wondering, you got me that new shotgun for trap shooting for Christmas and we have only gone shooting a couple of times, I was wondering if we could go next weekend?"


My Mom replied, "Sure Jae, I don't think it will be too much trouble."

My Dad continued, "Yeah I think it will be fun, ill rent a gun too so I can join in with you, and maybe one for Jon too, how does that sound?"

I replied, "Sounds awesome, thanks guys, I'm going to head on and brush my teeth and get ready for bed, love you guys."

"Love you too.", they replied in unison. I then brushed my teeth, got on my night clothes, then stopped by my brothers room to see him doing the same thing I was doing a moment ago. "Hey Jon, Mom and Dad said we will all go shooting next weekend, they said they will even rent you a gun, what do you think?"

"Sounds fun, we could probably go out to eat that night too, hopefully.", he replied.

"Heck that sounds great, alright we have school tomorrow, so you need to go to bed early so I don't have trouble waking you up ok.", I suggested.

He replied, "Alright fine, see you in the morning Jae."

"See you tomorrow Jon." I then shut the door to his room and proceeded to my room to lay down and get ready to get myself and my brother up that next morning.

    But little did I know that the next mornings to-do list would not go as originally planned, and little did I know I wouldn't be waking up in my room the next morning or waking up to see my family that next morning.

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    I finally woke up from my seemingly endless sleep and OH MY GOD did I feel out of it. My vision was blurry and could hardly hear anything, and the things I could hear and see were completely foreign to me. I was finally able to make out a voice, a women's voice, "Time of death, 6;48 a.m., March 12th, 2023." OK, a few things I gathered from that, if this was the next day the day was right, when I went to bed it was March 11th, but that year, the year was 2017 last time I checked, and then that first thing she said, "TIME OF DEATH" who was she talking about, it couldn't be me, I wasn't dead, but I couldn't move either, it was like I was paralyzed. Then my vision cleared up to see I was in a hospital bed, and it also seemed my nose stretched out farther in front of my face, NO! priorities, I am in a hospital bed, which means they are talking about me, and I can see them putting up the equipment, nope this was not happening. With all my strength I was able to take my arms and push myself up, and I started breathing then to, I didn't even realize I wasn't breathing until just then. Everyone of the doctors and nurses were shocked, but what they were feeling could not compare to what I was feeling.

    MY ARMS, th-th-they weren't mine anymore, I could move them all the same but they were not my human arms, these were P-A-W-S. Three fingered blue paws with no claws, and these steel guarders on the top part of my wrists. I-my torso also wasn't mine, it was black near the top part of the torso and it then zigzags with blue on the lower half. I didn't see my legs but I didn't have to, I knew what they looked like, pure black furred digitigrade legs with three toes on each foot. There wasn't a mirror but I had a good idea of what my face looked like, blue fur with black fur making a sort of mask and a small muzzle included. I knew I had red eyes now and I could feel my new feelers on each side of my head, I felt my ears move down when I went into shock, and of course I could feel the tail that was half the size of my height. I knew what it was I had turned into, played enough of the game and watched enough of the show to know. I was a Riolu, down to the size of one too, I was so much smaller than the people around the room, it was disorienting.

    But it was nowhere near as disorienting as what I felt next. After my realization which to me seemed like hours when in reality was only a few seconds, I screamed.

    "RRRRIIIIIIIIIIIIIOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!"

    I felt it that burning sensation in my left shoulder, just what happened I would feel this much excruciating pain. It felt as if my shoulder was on fire while salt was getting added constantly to the horrific endeavor. While the doctors and nurses started laying me down fast and putting me under sedative while wearing a breathing mask on, I saw a view of what happened, on my left shoulder was heavily wrapped and very bloody bandages, and with the blood I saw laying on the bed, that means whatever injured me, or whoever this was that got injured, was either a really bad stab wound or a gunshot, and the last thought I had before drifting off to into a sedative induced sleep was, "What just happened?"
Pokemon Revival is a story about a high school student who wakes up and finds himself wounded and a different creature entirely, this is the story of how he will live his life from now on. This i my first story and the mature warning i just for mild blood, but it is there for it might get more violent later on. Thank you for reading and the authors note is very important. Pokemon Belongs to Nintendo and Game Freak and all Pokemon belong to them as well, all i own is the characters, the personality of the characters, and the situations that they are put in. There are also references to other media, but it is very mild referencing and if needed i will put it in.Glee 

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roxaspwnsxion Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Student Digital Artist
Alright, you've caught my interest. Definitely more attention-getting than my first chapter. (shameless promotion) 
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XetaJTS Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Hobbyist Writer
I will give yours a check once I get the chance!
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roxaspwnsxion Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Student Digital Artist
Id love the input
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XetaJTS Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Hobbyist Writer
I will do my best to get to you about it when I can! Probably tomorrow or the next day!
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roxaspwnsxion Featured By Owner Edited 1 day ago  Student Digital Artist
thanks! I have significantly less chapters, but they are longer 
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XetaJTS Featured By Owner 1 day ago  Hobbyist Writer
Cool! My word count for each chapter is minimum of 3000 presently.
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Astragami-sama Featured By Owner May 4, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
An interesting start I like this story
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XetaJTS Featured By Owner May 4, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! Pokemon Mystery Dungeon (PMD) - Lucario (happy) 
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UnversedLupine Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
Awesome start!
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XetaJTS Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
It gets better! Pokemon Mystery Dungeon (PMD) - Lucario (happy) 
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UnversedLupine Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
I can tell
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SlowkingRock3r Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2017  Hobbyist General Artist
There are some silly conventions errors here and there. Other than that, it's pretty good.
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XetaJTS Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
oh I see, nevermind
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XetaJTS Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
Convention errors?
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InaT01 Featured By Owner Edited Jan 11, 2017  Hobbyist
Nice start. :)

A couple things to keep in mind:
  • Make a new paragraph when a new character is speaking
  • I think the word "replied" and "said" is overused. You could add how the character replied or said. Did the character reply happily? Sadly?
  • New paragraph each time you talk about a new topic!


Hope this will help! :hug:
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XetaJTS Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks, when I get the time I might go back and fix those problems, I don't know when I will have time but I will be sure to add this in, thank you for the feedback, and if you could you give me a couple more words I could use instead of said and replied.
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InaT01 Featured By Owner Edited Jan 11, 2017  Hobbyist
No problem! ^_^

Here's a list I found online: synonyms-antonyms.com/synonyms…

If you want in-depth constructive comments, you should join :iconprojectcomment:. The members in the group are very good at critiquing deviations to improve your work! (Important note: You have to make a constructive comment before submitting a deviation to get constructive comments. :))
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XetaJTS Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2017  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for the synonyms and the new group. I am going to check it out at some point.
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InaT01 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2017  Hobbyist
No problem! :)
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